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Oneshot The Master of Death by Hostiel - T - HP/Avengers

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Selethe, Jul 10, 2018.

  1. Selethe

    Selethe normalphobe

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    Title: The Master of Death
    Author: Hostiel
    Rating: T
    Genre: -
    Status: Complete
    Library Category: Alternates
    Pairings: none
    Summary: Thanos' victory was so close he could taste it. The city around him was ash and rubble, its heroes crippled or dead. The final stone would soon be his—and then Death would be his. The Master of Death disagreed.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12912432/1/The-Master-of-Death

    HP/Avengers crossover

    Written by the enigmatic @Hostiel. A few months ago, some of us were joking around that he should capitalize on the release of the Infinity Wars movie to put out a new piece of fanfiction, and climb the rungs of popularity again. He did. And it worked. It's only 2k, but surprisingly, it's actually a pretty good way to spend 5 minutes. It's in the vein of HFY, for those who like that stuff. There's a spare few grammatical lapses that a beta could fix, but... you know how when you read something, even if it was written quickly, the words just seem to ooze competence and authorial skill? This has that, in my opinion.

    I wasn't sure if I should stick this up in the review board because of its length, but in the spirit of getting more things up for review, I thought why not.

    There's not much else to say. It's good. 4/5
     
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  2. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    ???
    Are you drunk? The words ooze neither of those things.

    This is trash. Typical 'Everything is lost until Harry shows up and trashes the bad guy' this time in the Marvel universe. I've read the same thing a dozen times over across many different fandoms. Thanos might as well not exist, Harry is a nonsensical unlikable mess and calls Thanos a Dark Lord before sound defeating him without issue.

    The writing is bland and full of mistakes. The only good thing on this fic is how short it is so we can be done with it all the faster and not waste a lot of time.

    1/5
     
  3. Fatality

    Fatality Order Member

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    Yeah agreed with Rep, this was just a boring curbstomp. Lame wish fulfilment of someone wanting to see Thanos get his ass handed to him. You actually could show a decent Thanos/MoD!Harry fight I reckon, but this doesn’t even attempt to - just has Harry show up, drop some edgy lines that fall flat, use some uncreative magic against Thanos while he kind of just kind of stands there and half heartedly struggles. This is the dude with 5 infinity stones who made kicking the Avengers’ asses look casual, and that’s how you’re going to do him??

    Reading this did not put a smile on my face. 1/5
     
  4. Sorrows

    Sorrows Queen of the Flamingos Moderator

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    Eh it's not bad. It's reasinably competently written but I agree there is something a little bland about it. I've got nothing against curbstomp HP oneshots but this lacks a certain flair. There is no real build up and no playing with tension or pace or characters or place.

    I think with a bit of a rethink the writer could turn it into something fun, they have ok technical skills so there's no reason why not.

    2.5/5
     
  5. Rehio

    Rehio Bad Dragon ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    I don't think there's anything interesting here. It's not very long, and in that short amount of time nothing impactful really happens. There's no struggle or great revelation. Even the impact of the Master of Death arriving is just bland. The battle they have at the very end is okay, but by that point I wasn't really interested.

    It's not awful or anything, it just doesn't have any hook. 2/5.
     
  6. pbluekan

    pbluekan Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Agreed with Rep and Fatality. This oozes nothing but edgy wish fulfillment.

    There is no creativity here in any part of it. The dialogue is just catch phrases and edgy one liners, and the fight is nothing more than: “Thanos did __, and it had no effect. The Master of Death did __ and Thanos screamed.”

    1/5
     
  7. Sey

    Sey Not Worth the Notice DLP Supporter

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    Misses Thanos’ character.

    1/5
     
  8. Dubious Destiny

    Dubious Destiny Seventh Year

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    Usual MoD oneshot. I saw a similar one some time back. I'll edit it in once I find it again.

    Honest rating 1/5
    MoD Bonus +1
    Rating 2/5

    EDIT:
    Here's the fic- For Balance
    by InvisibleJediMaster. There are differences, but the theme is the same.
    Honestly, I liked this one(For Balance) better.

    EDIT 2: HP avengers MoD crossovers are almost always wish fulfillment.
     
    Last edited: Jul 18, 2018
  9. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Similar theme, much better execution. Still pointless but at least enjoyable.
     
  10. Dubious Destiny

    Dubious Destiny Seventh Year

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    Hey, what happened to the stars? How do you rate fics now?
     
  11. pbluekan

    pbluekan Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Agreed. For Balance is actually written competently.
     
  12. Dubious Destiny

    Dubious Destiny Seventh Year

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    Decided to post a thread in Almost Recommended for it, instead of using this thread. Here it is:
    For Balance by InvisibleJediMaster -K+
     
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  13. oakes

    oakes Unspeakable DLP Supporter

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    I have to agree is it the mobile site? I dont have any star rating on my page either.
     
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