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Abandoned Control by Anonymous58 - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Andro, Apr 13, 2010.

  1. Arbiter

    Arbiter Groundskeeper

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    A great Fiction. I just hope it's not Abandoned.
     
  2. Mutt

    Mutt High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    10 out of 5. This shit is fucking amazing.
     
  3. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Gone quite over-the-top the moment the prologue ended. The melodrama was always present but I'd assumed the writer was capable of reining it in. Evidently not.

    Well, whatever. Good run, still an entertaining read with a chance of going completely sour if the writer isn't careful.
     
  4. samkar

    samkar Temporarily Banhammered

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    There's a new chapter
     
  5. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    People should not be allowed to say this and nothing else. Go read it first, fag -_-

    Anyway, works about the same way the last chapter did, not more melodramatic and not less so. Dumbledore I liked; and Tonks' presence allows for tension and conflicts of interests later on. So the set-up is sound IMO, and I don't mind the style too much. It remains an entertaining read.

    Link to update.
     
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  6. oephyx

    oephyx Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Seriously didn't expect an update. Usually it's just a random retarded necros...
    I don't mind, now I can go read it. :p Will edit with comments.

    Edit: I found the chapter slightly bland, but well written enough. His relationship with Tonks is engaging, and made the chapter decent. Could have hoped for slightly more after the wait.
     
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  7. Perfection

    Perfection Fourth Year

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    I appreciate such posts - I wouldn't have looked at the fic otherwise and he can always edit his post later with his review.

    Thumbs up, samkar!
     
  8. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    ... what? He can very well read it first and then post a comment, and achieve the exact same result -- telling others the story has updated. And if he doesn't want to do that, there's no problem if he doesn't post at all, because chances are someone will post (I knew it had updated just fine without this).

    Either is better than shooting off some statement that is so hasty he didn't even have time to hit the fullstop key at the end of his sentence, and is only not regarded as a failtastic one-liner (even though it really is) because its nature.
     
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  9. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Just put it on your alerts.

    As for the fic itself, it seems that Harry is too mature and I'm a bit iffy about

    Pedophile!Tonks.
    Otherwise excellent chapter. I look forward to seeing how the Boy-Murderer is going to be treated at Hogwarts.
     
  10. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    Something else -- is anyone actually serious when they start screaming pedo because Tonks kissed Harry? What the fuck is wrong with people :/

    Harry/Tonks makes it better, not worse :s
     
  11. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Perhaps if your going for a disturbing angle in this story. If that's what the author is going for, then I'm cool. Just seems weird that Tonks is at least 19 and Harry is only 14.
     
  12. b0b3rt

    b0b3rt Backtraced

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    This is true. Then again, Harry is kinda mature for his age, though he expresses himself rather violently. I mean, you grow up pretty fast in those environments.
     
  13. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    [​IMG]

    You know, Ike Broflovski was very mature for his age too.
     
  14. Harvest King

    Harvest King Third Year

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    To be fair, this wouldn't even be an issue in the real world. How many times do you see celebrities dating older women and not bat an eye at it in real life? Look at all the old ladies after Bieber.
     
  15. EinStern

    EinStern Seventh Year

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    To be fair, those old ladies are incredibly fucking disturbing.
     
  16. Stalin's Pipe Organs

    Stalin's Pipe Organs Auror

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    Yes it would be an issue in the real world. We're not talking about a 29 and 24 year old hooking up. We're talking about a 14 year old potentially dating a 19 year old.
     
  17. Harvest King

    Harvest King Third Year

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    When Emma Watson was like 16 or 17 wasn't she dating a 27 year old or something like that? I'm pretty sure Miley Cyrus dated some older guy in her teens as well. I've known freshmen in high school who date 19/20 year old people, and they only just turned 15.
     
  18. nath1607

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    I reread this story, and like last time, I am still wondering why Harry hates Dumbledore so much and think he is controling. Dumbledore has no reason to be anything to Harry other than a headmaster, so it stands to be that Harry is just on the shits because Dumbledore left him at the Dursleys. His only family left.

    Sounds like a rather shit excuse considering the hate we've seen directed at Dumbledore. While if he was the BWL we can maybe get into it that he would check on Harry to make sure he was fine, now however, he is just an orphan which considering the war there were plenty of.
     
  19. Trig

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    While we don't exactly know about the Dursley's treatment of Harry in this fic, even their canon behavior would be enough of a reason to hate Dumbledore.

    But, if I remember correctly, Harry blames him for Ginny's death, which isn't entirely unreasonable considering he's Albus-fucking-Dumbledore.
     
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  20. gbbz

    gbbz Professor

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    ^^ above, right.

    nath got it totally wrong.

    Anyway, I was beyond joyful this story, I tagged as abandoned, got updated.

    Harry here is a bit young, and I always wondered where exactly he learned all those evil spells (that's nitpicking a but I know), but his courting of Ginny and her subsequent death really set the stage.

    But despite my fondness for the fic I must ask myself a question. What the hell is with all those women?! Three totally different females, only one of which plays an active role in Harry's current life. I think that's a bit much. It seems like the author couldn't decide and combines ideas as they come.

    That said I don't get it that people react adversely to Tonks making a move on Harry. He is quite mature I think, and she is shaken by her training and all that has happened. She is what, 19? that's a difference of 7 years? Not much. I think the problem people raise can be construed as a bit sexist. That she is an old girl trying to corrupt a very young boy. If I recall, in my High School class a girl (16) dated a 22-23 yo, and it didn't raise an eyebrow. My male cousin 29 dated a 19 yo girl and again it didn't cause a scandal.

    I'm scared to imagine the level of backwardness some people that post here must endure.
    Cheers.
     
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