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Complete Delenda Est by Lord Silvere - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by craigery9700, Nov 19, 2009.

  1. Kurufinwe

    Kurufinwe Groundskeeper

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    Rather average chapter. Oruma I myself liked the idea with lamp :) Now rather interesting is that all death eaters are after Harry. Maybe they will kidnap Bella to lure him?
     
  2. FreakLord

    FreakLord Professor DLP Supporter

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    I don't think we can count Lily as a 'witch by his side'.

    So, who is the other one?
     
  3. Oruma

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    It's not a bad idea per se, I just thought that Moody'd be more paranoid than using such a public location for contact. Unless, of course, it's the authors setting up a plot point/backdoor/whatever to give Voldie & the DEs a chance to ambush Harry & Moody later on.
    (i.e. they learned of these two frequenting and checking the lamp post often, set up attack, ten good men lost their lives that sort of thing)

    I wonder if Cygnus, who was after all the Minister for Magic, will get a public funeral. If not it's very probable that Bella will be attacked, if not the other Blacks as well.

    @gbbz: I felt that Harry's still pussyfooting, not yet his own man. Hopefully that'll change soon; after all, with the DEs after him it's time he starts dosing out badassery. He BETTER.
     
  4. gbbz

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    He did give her the RING!
     
  5. Knyght

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    Because she's probably gonna need her ass saving in the future, not because she's useful.
     
  6. gbbz

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    Maybe. But you have no idea how useful she could've become. He'll save her lovable buttocks, and disclose his origins, or she'll be one of the components of his hit-squad.

    Either way, Lily has some role to play.
     
  7. TheWiseTomato

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    Harry has the One Ring, he just needs to give out a few more now before he can start his rivalry with Voldemort.

    Didn't like the lampost. Convoluted, unnecessary and clumsy. Protean charm on a coin anyone?

    I want to see Harry take his hand to a few DE's...God knows he isn't doing anything else.
     
  8. Kurufinwe

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    Wise Tomato, if its protean charm on coin like you suggest, there will be opinions about imitating DA and that it was done thousand times. About DE, well it's all look now when he had stopped playing school and there will be some action. Comparing to LOTR also isn't funny in my opinion. Any work on this site isn't even near the league of this classic. It's like comparing yourself to God.
     
  9. Catman

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    Except Lord of the Rings is real.

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    sorry
     
  10. TheWiseTomato

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    The English language has been done a thousand times too, and we Australians/Americans are such terrible imitators. Bastards, aren't we?

    I don't see why the DA doing the Protean is a valid reason for an author to avoid it unless they completely lack originality and throw it on a galleon coin. The lampost route is awkward and complicated. If it isn't a major plot detail and takes a reader a few times to read something over to make sense of it, ur doin it rong.

    Your sentence on the DE's is confusing. Grammar please.

    Opinion on LOTR is subjective. Also, if you'd go back and read my previous post, you'd note my witty use of the sarcasm font when talking about the Rings.
     
  11. Nooblet

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    Excellent family drama, although not much happening on Harry's end
     
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  12. FreakLord

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    I like the way bellatrix is thinking.
    The chapter is a bit short.
     
  13. Sesc

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    Really? I rather thought this chapter could have been produced by the worse half of the author-duo. It was written in a really bland way, had ridiculously overpowered spells (Harry casting this illusion spell across the entirety of Britain, the new method of travelling which goes through every and any protection -- both of which will lead to serious dramaturgical problems since Harry can now escape from anywhere, any time) and a magical core.

    Bellatrix's part was better, but that was only the last bit. All in all, a quite weak chapter (and I didn't even mention the shopping trip).
     
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  14. Moloch

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    Stupefy Multipli- whatever the fuck he said.

    I wanted to punch a baby.
     
  15. se7en

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    I thought that this chapter was a little disappointing, but I like that Bellatrix's side is moving along faster than I thought it would.
     
  16. kpjam

    kpjam First Year

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    I try not to respond when I have nothing new to add but...

    The Bella parts were pretty good.
    The Harry parts were horseshit (at best).
     
  17. hgf

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    I really hoped that the Hogwarts protections had bitchslapped Harry hard when he tried the phoenix fire thing.
     
  18. Sin Saiori

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    The Harry-side of the story is pretty consistent so far: overly complicated and not too well thought out.

    The Bella-side is definitely getting better every chapter. Her character seemed to start out a little flimsy, but she's certainly grown a backbone knowing just who Lord Black is now.
     
  19. Provis

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    I agree with the previous comments about how the Bellatrix portions were superior to Harry's portions; however, people are neglecting to mention the best use ever for the image projection spell—impersonating Dumbledore just to mess with people.
     
  20. Sin Saiori

    Sin Saiori Death Eater

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    I'm a little worried that the projection spell is gonna get abused out the ass. Goes through wards? Check. No risk? Check. Can impersonate anyone? Check. Seemingly the only downside is the strain it puts on Harry to cast and maintain it, but it's only going to get easier as he practices with it more.
     
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