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Discussion in 'Fanfic Discussion' started by Methene, Nov 22, 2007.

  1. Lungs

    Lungs KT Loser ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Guys, Fleur is the spy.
     
  2. CrackedMind

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    Lungs: ruining the plots of stories since forever.
     
  3. Lungs

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    It's not like we weren't going to tell them to begin with. :p
     
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    Paraphrasing Emiya Shirou:
    "I don't die, when I'm killed"
     
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    Nope, nothing to see here. Everything looks fine. :ph34r:
     
  6. Insanity

    Insanity Second Year DLP Supporter

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    I like the idea but as a few people have said (and I'm sure you know) we need a lot more than that basic outline.

    What I would say for now is i think 7 is to many character to use at least right away, though you could start with seven and have a few die quickly or not accept what is happening i suppose. I would much rather have three of four fleshed out characters with a lot if attention paid to them and their interaction than a story with Harry, Snape and 5 people with little more than names.

    As far as Ron and Hermione are concerned I agree with what other people have said before, leave them out of it. Having them around Harry makes it less likely for him to change and grow up (though not impossible as some authors have managed it convincingly). If you must include them find some good and believable reason for them to be included other than that they are Harry's friends or that Hermione is "the brightest witch of her age".
     
  7. Rakkety Tam

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    If that is the definition of a Bond girl, I have a strange desire to see Cormac McLaggen as Bond.
     
  8. Lungs

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    I know I generally think of Vesper Lynd when I think Bond girl.

    Also, I think I might recruit Cormac McLaggen, so sure of his abilities and all, down the line just to kill him off. :D
     
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    If you make McLaggen canon!arrogant, then you should make him good. Like, really, really fucking good at whatever he does. That way, when he dies, the team actually suffers a serious blow, as opposed to laughing about it.
     
  10. Inert

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    Agreed on the Cormac thing. Seeing him written as something competent rather than just an arrogant school-kid would be a nice change of pace.

    As to the spy issue. Fleur is the best choice. She can be the "Bond Girl" that acts in Vesper Lynd's place. Helpful, has her romance with Harry, only to betray him and the team in the end, possibly in some desperate gambit to save Bill, the man she had originally fallen in love with. Harry, who has been growing up on the job, transitioning from a schoolboy with a penchant for surviving into a man who's got some serious skills, would be forced to kill her in the end, for the sake of the overall goal of killing Voldemort. He becomes a balance between Dumbledore, someone who made questionable decisions in the face of serving the greater good, and Craig's Bond: simply ruthless.

    I can't tell you how much this idea appeals to me.
     
  11. arkkitehti

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    What about starting the story with Harry killing Voldemort (in a Casino Royale opening sort of way) and then build up towards greater enemies and more glamorous locales? That way you could have a somewhat skilled (or at least experienced), older Harry who still has a lot to learn, a clean slate ministry that could be more competent than the Fudge/Scrimgeour clusterfuck in canon, and possibilities for even greater enemies around the globe.

    There could be some super secret organization of evil overlords who were pulling the strings of Voldemort; after all he did spend around two decades learning stuff abroad before starting his Dark Lord business, even though he was making horcruxes already at the age of seventeen. Fleur could have been their double agent from the beginning, and she could kill Bill herself to hook up with Harry.

    I'm somewhat concerned with the idea that killing Voldemort is just some kind of training exercise that still takes 50 000 words to go through. Either get over it in the prologue or make it the main plot of the story, with a possible sequel hook somewhere in the end.
     
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    So if Fleur is the spy, who is she spying for. Is it the French government to see how the British are handling the situation? Did Voldemort kill her parents and take her sister Gabrielle hostage in order to track Harry? Or her own sociopathic need to learn the secret of immortality?

    If you are going to do Fleur as a casino royale bond girl, you should build her up during the horcrux hunt and after the defeat of Voldemort she runs away with whatever her goal is. You could then easily make a bond Harry storyline, where he has to fight bad guys in cool places with her as the underlying main villain /romantic interest. With bitches on the side of course, its bond not a saint.
     
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    I very much liked the idea that arkkitehi posted, about OC villains. While OCs inherently come with the tag of being utter shit, I feel like Lungs could believably pull off a French Dark Lord that has Fleur over a barrel in some way.
     
  14. Blank402

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    Agreeing with what some people have said, I think this idea works better post-Voldemort. I just don't see much room for spying and all that in Voldemort controlled Britain.
     
  15. Rakkety Tam

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    This makes me think you should mesh this story with Goldeneye giving Bill an Alex Trevelyan sort of role. The people in the group let power go to their heads, but they know that Harry would never agree to help them..even for friends. Fleur could have been a spy planted by them to keep tabs on Harry, but she falls in love with him along the way.
     
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    Have any of you ever read Dagger and Rose?

    /me stands in front of the computer like a boss
     
  17. Jjf88

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    What is Harry's role if Fleur is the spy? Ugh, total retard moment here, sorry guys.
     
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    Fleur is a double agent. Sort of like Snape, except less classy-as-fuck, what with the quintuple agent thing.
     
  19. Lamora

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    More like Reichencawk, right!? HAHAHAHAHA

    I liked the original idea better than I do this one - a coalition of wizards to full the vacuum that Dumbledore left. Not Craig's Bond movies rewritten with HP characters and plot.
     
  20. Peace

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    I like the idea of Cormac being on the team. You could probably turn him into the team's politician, its inside man in the Ministry, based on the connections his family seems to have in canon (I doubt that Scrimgeour is the only politician that they know). Then when he's killed off to the cheers of readers the team could be seriously handicapped since he'd no longer be around to run interference for them inside the Ministry.
     
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