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New and Almost Recommended Harry Potter Fanfiction

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Dark Minion, Sep 20, 2014.

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  1. Ncjeur

    Ncjeur Second Year

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    About "I Still Haven't Found What I'm Looking For":
    Three more chapters have been published, and it totally sucks. I'm saddened to say that the author seems to focus on nothing but the Jedi-bashing. Harry is a dick, too, and it was hard for me to even finish reading it. The writing is lacking, and it feels like nothing has happened at all (despite 80k words).
    So, if you haven't begun reading it yet, I wouldn't bother to do so now.
    There are far too few good HP/SW crossovers :(
     
  2. Hero of Stupidity

    Hero of Stupidity Villain of Sensibility ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    I agree it is somewhat more about bashing than anything else. The problem is I quite agree with it. Never really liked the Jedi attitude, and what they did to Ahsoka was beyond stupid. (Not to mention Revan.) I think it'S still too early to judge the story, it's extremely at the beginning.
     
  3. IBG

    IBG Seventh Year

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    Her other fic is at 200k+ words and even that still feels too early to judge, so it's just the way she writes.

    I don't mind the bashing, but the way it's done involves so much shit that does nothing for plot progression and is just there to facilitate bashing, which does not make a good story.

    She could probably lop off a good 30k words without changing the way a single thing in the story is perceived, because it's all repetition at this point.
     
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    It's not exceptional but I am enjoying the story.
     
  5. Peter North

    Peter North Dark Lord

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    There are better time wasting fics but this one keeps me mildly entertained. Mostly I just want to see Harry lay Asoka and Aayla though.
     
  6. Snapdragon

    Snapdragon Banned

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    I'm more interested about Harry's backstory here. There are these vibes that he's seen a *lot* which might mean he has been around alone for a very long time. He also seems to have some objective finding something/information but we don't know what this is really about. Not really a fan of the whole foreshadowed harem tripe and the Gary Stu act isn't good for creating future tension/dramaturgy.

    P.S. Wouldn't be surprised if he's the shadow "boss" of the Bounty Hunter union which gave "himself" the license to pretend to be one. At least that could be hinted at during the first Jedi meeting discussing his strange Bounty Hunter application
     
  7. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    So this story just ended. Before anything interesting happens (i.e. the creation of a body for the fem!Voldemort, the point of the entire story), the author literally wrote "rocks fall everyone dies" (plus Daphne getting pregnant at 13 as a "consolation prize"). Then he posted another chapter claiming it was a prank, and then he rage quit, because he couldn't handle the reactions to his "prank".

    Talk about implosions, lol.
     
  8. Ghosthree3

    Ghosthree3 Unspeakable DLP Supporter

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    Dude what.
     
  9. Ncjeur

    Ncjeur Second Year

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    Hm, although the abandonment is extreme and the posting of the chapter was kinda asking for it, it's still no excuse for personal threats.
    But that's the problem with anonymity of the internet- you can't expect decency from anyone.
     
  10. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    Hah, nice. I'm glad I stopped reading that story awhile back when Harry became irredeemable in his quest to create a body for the voice in his head.

    I think it was about the time he decided the kill Ginny in order to save the Diary because he thought it might help him.

    Edit: I skipped to the last couple of chapters. It didn't look like a joke to me. It looked like the author got sick of writing it and decided to kill Harry off for a reunion with that voice.

    To be had, from what I read, Harry dying was probably the happy ending, seeing as he'd probably kill many more people to get what he wanted.
     
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    I dropped the story for the same reasons.

    It's been a while since I've ead the story but didn't it have a very creepy Harry checking out an unconscious naked Ginny before he killed her?
     
  12. kinetique

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    Yeh I can't believe someone that's building a body for Voldemort would check out a naked girl who was unconscious. Grounds to never read the story again.
     
  13. IBG

    IBG Seventh Year

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    Hahahaha that's hilarious. I stopped following that story ages ago because literally nothing was happening, but I'm tempted to go read it now just to see this.

    I'll go read like the last 3 chapters, that should be enough for me to get a good grasp of everything that happened in the 15 or so I missed, given my memory of the authors writing style.
     
  14. Odran

    Odran Fourth Champion

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    I haven't even taken a look at this fic before, but that last chapter is fucking hilarious.

    To spare people going to FFN, here it is:

     
  15. TMD

    TMD High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Was the story any good?

    On a somewhat related note, I remember reading a naruto fan fiction back in the day where the author claimed to have cancer and be dying. Later turns out he just couldn't be bothered to write anymore and felt like he needed an excuse. The internet is a strange place sometimes.
     
  16. Ghosthree3

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    At least people would know for sure that the story was abandoned I guess. The anticipation can be a killer.
     
  17. The Iron Rose

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    Hardly unrealistic but you can scarcely blame someone for finding that uncomfortable to read.
     
  18. IBG

    IBG Seventh Year

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    Honestly if not for the random Daphne pregnancy it wasn't an awful end to the fic. Too sudden for sure, but I wouldn't have had much issue with it if it was drawn out some more with a greater focus on the hunt for Sirius.

    I can't see the fic ever being interesting if it plays out any other way, if Harry got a body for Violet the main premise would kind of be fulfilled but it wouldn't end the fic, so the rest would be kind of pointless/boring.
     
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  19. Sesc

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    Eh? The author ended the story before it ever really started. What's there now is useless, because it's a lot of build-up for a plot that never comes. From a technical standpoint alone, it's a horrible "end" to the story. You can kill characters, even the main characters. But you do that after they have accomplished what they set out to do, that's where the tragedy of this sort of ending comes from, not randomly halfway down the line. That's not tragedy, that's just pointless.
     
  20. IBG

    IBG Seventh Year

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    Yeah that's why I said if it was drawn out some more and the whole Sirius thing was made to feel more like a finale.

    It's just that I felt most of the other ways the fic could go wouldn't be that interesting really. Once he got Violet a body the main plot of the fic would just be over and the story never felt very Voldemort focused so it wouldn't be that good to read beyond that.
     
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