WIP Chaos Theory by Moczo - T - Fate/Stay Night

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  1. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Golden Patronus Admin

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    Title: Chaos Theory
    Author: Moczo
    Rating: T
    Fandom: Fate/Stay Night
    Pairing: None yet, but looks like Shirou/Illya
    Chapters: 17
    Words: 99,040
    Updated: November 4, 2012
    Published: October 3, 2010
    Status: Work in Progress

    Summary: Sometimes, the tiniest of changes can have the greatest impact on the world. One chance encounter goes in a new direction, and the course of the Holy Grail War is irrevocably changed...

    Link: FF.Net

    Probably my favourite story in the fandom, period. Excellent writing, funny at times and tense at others, I think the author does very well in capturing the feel of the visual novel.


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  2. 1and1is3

    1and1is3 First Year

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    I'm actually surprised that it took this long for this story to appear here.

    Brilliant writing, brilliant plot but updates are a bit slow for my taste. And of course the character of Ilya makes a very fun read.
     
  3. Tasoli

    Tasoli Headmaster

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    Awesome story one of the best story of the fandom. easily 5 star.
     
  4. NuitTombee

    NuitTombee Dark Lord

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    Great story so far.

    And though neither of them knew it at the time, they had just ensured that the plans of basically every single person in the conflict to come were going to go completely wrong. Except Rin. Her plans went wrong just fine without any outside help.
    I loved this part. :D
     
  5. yak

    yak Moderator Moderator DLP Supporter

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    It's a good story, but there are a few things that bug me.

    The author uses a lot of text at the very beginning that can be summed up with "this is an alternate universe". It was a difficult piece of text to struggle through for no real benefit.

    The interactions between Shirou and Ilya seem a little forced, both in setup and execution.
     
  6. 1and1is3

    1and1is3 First Year

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    At any rate, it has been updated.
     
  7. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    I dunno, I actually like the parts between Shirou and Ilya the best of all the scenes.
     
  8. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    Well, it updated. This chapter though, MAN IT IS SO MEAN!

    Basically, everything sets up for the next chapter. Wooo.
     
  9. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage Prestige

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    It was a decent update, I especially liked Ilya's bit at the end.

    But yeah, ore of a set up for the next chapter.
     
  10. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    Yeah good chap. I was almost interested to see what a corrupted Archer would be like. =P
     
  11. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    This was updated, and dang, it's pretty awesome! Berserker is pretty awesome, unlike in the VN where he just get owned every route :(. Archer/Rin interaction was also very amusing as always.
     
  12. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    Update

    A continuation of the two battles. The interaction between Saber and Ilya was interesting. Let's hope next one doesn't take as long.
     
  13. Sin Saiori

    Sin Saiori Death Eater

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    I love this story and I read it the day I get an update, but these long breaks are maddening. I feel like I have to reread the at least the last 5 chapters to pick it up again.

    Still, a good update. Illya's fun to read as usual and the thing with Zouken was well done, but the lack of Shirou was mildly upsetting.
     
  14. yak

    yak Moderator Moderator DLP Supporter

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    This. I haven't read the last two chapters because I can't remember what the hell's going on. I'm considering giving up on it until it's complete.
     
  15. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    That'd be so sad :(

    This is really good heh.
     
  16. I Burn Water

    I Burn Water Seventh Year

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    Assuming that it gets completed.

    The chapter moves the story a long a little; lack of protagonist makes it less interesting than it could be.

    Its still my 3rd favorite Fate story though.
     
  17. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    So, this has been updated quite a few times since the last post. I think it's been fun to read, but this last chapter felt like there were some Deus Ex Machina moments.
     
  18. Airilife

    Airilife Top 1 Percent Prestige

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    Man. This story is too fabulous for it's own good, the next chapter should be very interesting with Ilya/Shirou interaction and Saber/Shirou interaction abound. Can't wait, and I liked Beserkers final words to Saber.
     
  19. Knyght

    Knyght The Chosen One

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    This story is now complete.

    It was a fun ride.
     
  20. fire

    fire High Inquisitor

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    Epic, literally.