Abandoned Duality by Anda Faith - M

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  1. Lord Ravenclaw

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    Title: Duality
    Author: Anda Faith
    Genre: Romance/Drama
    Rating: M
    Chapters: 40
    Words: 205,082
    Updated: May 1, 2016
    Published: July 4, 2011
    Status: Abandoned

    Pairing: Harry/Daphne
    Summary: HBP AU. It's hard enough being a teenager; add nefarious plots, the Dark Lord, and house rivalries into the mix. A story about enlightenment, darkness, growing up, and getting over yourself. Harry Potter/Daphne Greengrass

    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7145549/1/Duality

    This story admittedly kind of turned me off initially. But throughout there's small glimmers of brilliance that really drew me in. Harry turns OOC pretty quickly, be warned. Definitely some relationship angst in places too, but that's par for the course. Harry also isn't particularly gifted in magic, which makes it a little more canon-esque even as it goes off the rails in so many other (and interesting) ways.

    The author does a decent job of creating an air of mystery around Daphne and the other Slytherins. I did find myself wanting to know more. The layers are there, but it's a little slow moving. It's a character-driven story for sure, I doubt it'll ever make its way to Voldemort at this rate.

    The author is apparently studying as an interrogator, which gives the story some depth in the interactions between Harry and the various Slytherins. Especially near the end of the currently posted content.

    TL;DR:
    Harry is bedded by Daphne and slowly morph towards a pretty fucked up relationship that started as them sleeping together. He starts smoking which is slightly annoying, but fits well enough given Daphne's background growing up in a somewhat fucked up home and in with people of dubious character. Daphne keeps secrets from him and it drives him up the wall, angst and such. Together they smoke cigarettes, manipulate, and interrogate Malfoy over Christmas break trying to find out what he's doing in the Room of Requirements.

    Well worth a try if you're looking for something different to read.

    4/5


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  2. potterheadcharles

    potterheadcharles Third Year

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    This is one of the better fics right now in the WIP section. I have been following it almost from the start and there is something very natural in the way the author writes it. It almost flows like a movie.

    Harry's initial angst and then attitude change is done gradually and brilliantly. Daphne is awesome and there is always an aura of mystery around her. Although this is not a sweet romance by any stretch, there is a feel that she definitely cares for Harry more than she lets on. I cannot help but wonder if she will say 'I love you' by the end.

    Other Slytherins are done nicely as well, especially Blaise. His chemistry with Hermione and cocky attitude with others feel real.

    I will be very much disappointed if this gets abandoned. The author went into a brief hiatus a few chapters back but then started posting again. Let's see if this one gets completed!

    5/5 from me because I enjoy this tremendously.
     
  3. Odran

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    My issue with this fic is that seemingly Harry's generation (or at least Harry, Hermione, Greengrass, Zabini and Nott) is buffed as fuck in terms of intelligence, cunning etc., yet Voldemort and Dumbledore, and the rest of the old guard, seem to be the same as before. Also, fairly predictable, though mild, Ron bashing of a sorts.

    2/5 for now, might change my opinion later on, provided the author delivers on making Voldemort as something more than a vague presence in the background.
     
  4. T3t

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    This is one of the maybe three H/DG stories in the entire fandom I like, so I'm a bit biased. I also could have sworn that I'd already recommended it, but that might just be my brain playing tricks on me :?

    It definitely does take a sharp upswing near the later chapters, but I don't think the earlier content is particularly terrible - it just has some stuff that might set off others' "cliche triggers".
     
  5. Newcomb

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    Giving this a try, few random notes as I read:

    Gotta roll your eyes a little at the smoking thing. Harry: "Um, are you allowed to do that?" Daphne: "Rofl I do what I want, smoking is cool, and so am I, amirite?"

    Hermione seems a bit OOC at first, given how chill she is about Harry losing his V-card to basically a stranger. (Although she's a bit more in form when she catches them in the broom closet.)

    I like Ron here, despite a bit of the typical "slimy Slytherin" thing, the way he asks Harry about snogging is really true to life. Awkward as hell, but struck a chord.

    Zabini brilliance out of fucking nowhere:

    - Zacharias Smith is being a tool? "Here let me just Obliviate him."

    - Need info on Malfoy? "I'll just use Legilimency on Crabbe and Goyle. Easy-peasy."

    - Want to send an anonymous tip to the authorities? "Better let me do that, Potter. I know forging spells that can fool Aurors for some reason."

    Harry does this thing, where he self-comments on a personality change of his with some variation of: "It was odd, doing/thinking X. But somehow it didn't bother him." Not so much character development as a character forced-march.

    Still, intrigued enough to keep reading. The writing has that Certain Quality - the author is a storyteller, knows what he/she is doing for the most part. Will rate when/if I finish.
     
  6. Goten Askil

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    I really liked this one, it's probably one the best HP/DG in progress.

    The writing and Daphne's characterization are high points and the plot is quite good, despite some Super!Slytherins that can be a bit annoying.

    Also, not a big fan of the "God, no! we won't torture him physically! Psychologically? No problem." demarch, but I thinks it works.
    And I really liked that there wasn't more Ron!bashing, it sometimes seems like the norm for Harry/SlytherinGirl. All in all, 4/5 for me.
     
  7. gbbz

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    I tried this fic three times so far, in sufficient intervals, and I dropped it after Daphne lit the cigarette. I mean, what the hell?!?

    But, since it garnered some positive feedback so far, I will try to muddle through. Must it be so hard though? Is the story gaining in quality or is it as crappy as the first few chapters suggest?
     
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  8. Narf

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    Don't you guys know only cool kids smoke cigarettes, and if Daphne is smoking that means she's cool and rebellious and FUCK THE PO-LICE.
     
  9. Gengar

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    I had the same relationship with this fic, essentially. Tried it several times, couldn't get over Harry's characterisation. The smoking was a particularly rancid cherry that pulverized the camel entirely.
     
  10. Sesc

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    No. That is, if you want my opinion.

    I too keep trying to read this story, and I keep dropping it, because I feel like my brain is dripping out of my head already at the middle of the first chapter.

    Here's to everyone that tells me I'm in any Harry/Daphne that walks: I hate this story. It's shit.
     
  11. Chime

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    Yeah, the smoking thing is off-putting. Not because of the smoking itself, it's more that Daphne is acting like some American teenager. I could get behind the act of smoking if she had a better motivation for it. I mean, by her angle, she may as well just walk around casting slightly naughty/illegal magic, which would seem more appropriate given her background.

    I skimmed ahead. It gets a little better, but only when Daphne's not around. A shame the main draw is supposed to be their chemistry, but damn is she as insipid as Harry is passive in this.

    2.5/5, rounding up
     
  12. Oz

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    3/5, worth the read. I raised my eyebrows a bit when
    they kidnap and basically torture some death eater, can't remember who
    but it mostly kept me entertained.
     
  13. NuScorpii

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    It was fun. I'm not sure how I missed it until now, it seems to have been published in 2011.

    3.5/5
     
  14. Nadino

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    I honestly couldn't read past chapter 3. Does it get better? Interactions just seemed too weird to keep on reading.

    I wish 16-year-old girls were that straightforward when I was in school.

    Won't really rate it since I barely read it.
     
  15. Utsane | Lord Ataraxy

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    One of the better fics out there. It manages to do the whole "darker Harry" thing without making it look like the author tried to splice an image of canon!Harry and drew on eyeliner.

    I love Harry/Daphne, and this does it well, so I cannot not give it a 5/5
     
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    i messaged the author a couple months ago and she said she fully plans to finish it just not sure when

    4/5 Probably one of the best Harry/Daphne fics I've read so far