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Oneshot Fifty Shades of Gryffindor by Greasy Monkey - M

Discussion in 'Review Board' started by Taure, Feb 11, 2018.

  1. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Title: Fifty Shades of Gryffindor
    Author: Greasy Monkey
    Rating: M
    Library category: Restricted Section
    Status: Series of independent one shots
    Description:
    A series of one-shots featuring characters from the world of Harry Potter getting laid in incredible fashion. Shameless PWP. HP/HG/GW/FD/LL/PP/etc. Rated M for a reason.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12829859/Fifty-Shades-of-Gryffindor

    This is smut. It's quite well written. The characters have relatively strong character voices that makes the fic more than just Megamatt style generic sex - the author makes sure to establish the location, characters and scenario (albeit obviously following loose smut-oriented logic). However the characterisation somewhat falls away once the sex begins - that's the weak point.

    So far there is just one chapter, which is Harry/Fleur. Next chapter is supposed to be Harry/Parvati.

    For what it is, 4/5.

    Tags: author: Greasy Monkey, smut, Restricted Section, Harry/Fleur, Harry/multi
     
    Last edited: Feb 11, 2018
  2. pbluekan

    pbluekan Groundskeeper DLP Supporter

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    I fully approve of that cover image.

    For smut, it’s surpringly good; porn logic and all. Certainly it isn’t Hoosyourdaddy quality or anything, but it’s good. To be honest, the biggest thing that bothered me (not hot and bothered) was the author’s choice of adverbs and adjectives. They had some really strange choices here and there. Some really anachronistic choices that absolutely toss you, head first, out of the story.

    I second Taure. 4/5