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Oneshot Hamartia by Scela Letifer-PG13

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by Lady Almaren, May 3, 2006.

4/5, 20 votes
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  1. Lady Almaren

    Lady Almaren Seventh Year

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    May 3, 2006 #1
    Subject: Hamartia by Scela Letifer - PG13 (One Shot)


    Title: Hamartia
    Author:Scela Letifer
    Rating: PG13
    Genre: General, Angst
    Pairing: None
    Words: 4,728
    Published: May 2, 2005
    Status: Complete
    Summary: Pride cometh before the fall. Perhaps Dumbledore's actions are not what they seem.
    Link: http://community.livejournal.com/genfic_hogwarts/49942.html

    I thought this fic was great. It's an interesting look at the canon universe. Dumbledore is the epitome of a manipulative bastard.


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  2. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    May 3, 2006 #2
    Is it even possible to write that well?

    :O

    Just. Wow.

    ::jaw drop::
     
  3. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    May 3, 2006 #3
    HOLY COW!!! That was..... WOW.... I can't find the word for this fic. It's... wow!

    The ending was a little disappointing thought... maybe because I wanted more retribution. But still…

    Wow. (I feel like Neo)
     
  4. Syn

    Syn Fourth Year

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    May 3, 2006 #4
    brilliant.

    curious about remus/albus interaction though. i wish that had been fleshed out with another scene (a precursor perhaps?).

    but brilliant.
     
  5. cu_cullen9

    cu_cullen9 Second Year

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    May 3, 2006 #5
    wow

    i just finished this as well and, well... wow.
     
  6. shlager_5321

    shlager_5321 First Year

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    May 3, 2006 #6
    i have just finished readin it.

    and really, there is only one thing to say.

    WOW!
     
  7. TheIllusiveOne

    TheIllusiveOne Raptured to Hell

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    May 3, 2006 #7
    Was I the only one who thought this was nothing special... at all?
     
  8. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    May 3, 2006 #8
    Yeah, I thought it was alright. Not really quite wow material. Like, it was beautifully written, and the plot is lovely, but ... wow? Nuh ... :?
     
  9. Syn

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    May 3, 2006 #9
    it's too bad the author's other works are filled with slash.

    there was a really good evil!harry piece...but completely ruined by the slash at the end with snape.
     
  10. Sepanto

    Sepanto Groundskeeper

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    May 3, 2006 #10
    Excellent. i dare say this is the best fic around.
     
  11. The Sinner

    The Sinner Looked into the void

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    May 3, 2006 #11
    Wow indeed, though not the best fic ever. It was classic, especially the ending.
     
  12. tridentwatch

    tridentwatch Looked into the void

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    May 4, 2006 #12
    ok... i like!
     
  13. Deadman

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    May 5, 2006 #13
    Yea, it was written pretty well.

    It was interesting for it to be done as a little one-shot since I've seen that idea before, but strung out into 30,000 words or more. The speed of it was what kept me reading. Had it been any longer I would've gotten bored and irritated with the writing, (I didn't particularly care for the wording of some descriptions, I'm a simple kind of reader), but this was good.

    Got ten minutes to kill? Read it. Course, now I want to know what happens next...
     
  14. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    May 5, 2006 #14
    Meh. I think all the 'wow's here got me expecting something more.

    It was interesting. I liked Harry's little ending proclamation of "I am..." and the summation. But the rest of it just felt choppy and rushed in many parts. I suppose the easy comparison would be to Dzeytoun and all his Albus-POV and Remus-POV writing but without the coldness to the manipulation this one seemed to have. If it were longer it probably would have endeared Albus more.

    Overall, it was good.

    But not "wow" for me.
     
  15. parselmaster

    parselmaster Sixth Year DLP Supporter

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    May 5, 2006 #15
    It was pretty good but also not wow for me either. Better than most stuff you may find out there though.
     
  16. Mrriddler

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    May 6, 2006 #16
    Pretty good writing. Like nonjon said, reminencent of Dzeytoun. The story turns your mind in some weird directions. I recommend giving it a whirl.
     
  17. Patrik f

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    May 6, 2006 #17
    Wow!!

    Easily one of the best stories I have read. I like spy-Wormtail who isent some idiotic fool. A fool would not be able to live in animal form for over a decade in a wizarding home or bring back someone to life even with help.
     
  18. fatal

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    May 11, 2006 #18
    effing hell that was awesome O.O seriously wow. the tragedy actually made me feel ill.
     
  19. CGB

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    May 12, 2006 #19
    It was pretty good. I wouldn't say "Wow", but it's a good story.
     
  20. Black Man Walking

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    May 12, 2006 #20
    Beautiful

    My god this story even though a one shot was perfect it was so good it was not wow but beautiful absolutely perfect job of plot and the writing style os just beautiful this has to be one of the top stories ive ever read and beleive me ive read a LOT of stories this story is is there are no words for it
     
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