Title: Knight Harry
Author: PeaceThroughSuperiorFirepower
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure/Supernatural
Pairing: Harry Potter/Alicia Carpenter (but barely worth mentioning)
Status: COMPLETE (though author may expand)
Summary: Dumbledore was right. The Power Voldemort Knew Not was Love. Just not love as the Headmaster thought it to be. Xover with Dresden Files. Oneshot.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4832979/1/Knight_Harry

This is just an 11K word one-shot that sometimes reads more like a long summary than anything else. It's probably more Harry Potter than Dresden Files, but I thought it might get lost on the HP side of DLP. Certainly not epic or really even great, but considering how few HP/Dresden crosses there are, I found it a very enjoyable read.

The ending's a bit abrupt but overall, I like the premise behind the story. The author's note at the start admits this "is something that may or may not end up as a full length story somewhere down the track." I think it'd work much better as longer chaptered fic, but seeing as how that may never happen, I think this is still worth a read.

4/5 for me, but it's not like there's a lot of competition in the Dresden or HP/Dresden genre.


Checked by Minion, January 5, 2013
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Checked by Dark Syaoran, June 4, 2014.
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I liked it. I wish it hadn't ended where it did, but still it was an excellent one-shot.

4/5

 

Agreed - the ending was a little abrupt, but the pace of the story and character interactions were interesting.

4/5.

 

It's alright. The whole thing seemed a little standard with Dresden thrown in the mix. The whole betrayal theme got old a long time ago.

Still, not to many obvious errors. 3/5

 

4/5

I actually liked where it ended. None of that crappy epilogue stuff where he goes off and builds a magical castle, or whatever else the author cooks up. It was an interesting place to end it.

Didn't like the will reading or the betrayal parts though, they're a bit old.

 

I wasn't a huge fan of this story. Standard Betrayed!Harry moves away to train story. The whole Dresden part felt tacked on and wasn't fleshed out nearly enough. Like nonjon said it's basically a summary. It needed more time and descriptive words. Maybe throw in the battle against Deidre.

Point for making Flitwick part goblin. Point for Dresden. Point for decent grammar. 3/5

 

I disagree, I don't think he was betrayed at all.

As for the story, I liked it very much, though I don't see much love there. Point for way to kill Voldemort, point for good enough grammar and spelling, point for... whatever,

4/5 from me.

 

Something new for the Dresden Library is always nice. It could stand some expansion, but I usually say that about all the fics I enjoy. Good spelling, good grammer, nice... well, everything.

4/5.

Also, is it just me, or does the Dresden Fandom attract a higher quality of authors?

 

Good read, only wished it was a bit more flushed out. Or maybe doing something after Voldermort, with Harry being a knight. 4/5

 

God, that ending killed me. It was like "Awesome! Now how does all of this get wrapped up? ... Oh."

 

Yeah ending kinda blows but i'd still say keep it

4/5

 

The beginning betrayal by Dumbledore and Remus (wtf?) is painful to read through, along with the knowledge that Andromeda is the most powerful witch in 300 years and Filius takes care of everything at school (that's a mouthful). It seems unlikely that Hermione and Ron would leave him after so many years of hijinks. This is all within a few lines of course. I'm not sure whether brevity is the good or bad thing going for this story, but it's what defines it for sure.

Why does the Wizengamot demand he return when the prophecy is a secret?

"It’s been three of the happiest years of my life. A soft smile touches my face as I think of Alicia. Our relationship is…turbulent, there’s no other word for it. We’ve both dated other people since that first date but we keep coming back to each other.

I think I love her.
...
Remus, Ron and Hermione give me flat stares. I want to shudder at the look Ginny gives me. It’s pure lust. I make a mental note not to eat or drink anything she gives me."

Those three years just up and went like my patience. Too much telling. Especially with minute romance it's kind of nauseating.

This fits the bare minimum requirements of a piece of writing where Harry is alienated, disappears to train, and then reappears with the ending. I can't even excuse the cliche beginning (which I don't mind with other stories) because there's hardly any middle.

At least there are no English issues? This story feels like it was rushed to get through it, like a last minute school project or something. I would rate higher something that looked a bit garbled but didn't have this feel. 2/5.

Clarify: Drawing together Amoracchius and the Power That He Knows Not is a wonderful idea, and if were in the plot ideas thread, I would give it a thumbs up. Also if the author were here asking for critique, I would be more encouraging, but he is not, and plainly something so barebones shouldn't be posted as a story.

 

It's a mediocre story and shouldn't be admitted in just because it isn't common.

The first half sounds like a typical Indie!Harry story while the second half is, as nonjon said, a summary.

I give it a 2.5/5.

 

Was it Warlocke's(?) Inverse law of rarity? The rarer something this, the more slack you're willing to cut it iirc.

I'd say it was a decent story, a bit short on the desden side, as was advertised in the first post. Details are slim, but the concept is there, but I think the author was a little hesitant to put any specifics in, on the chance that they were wrong about something.

All in all, 3/5