Title: Maelstrom
Author: Inconclusive
Genre: Mystery/Action/Adventure
Rating: T/M
Pairing: Undecided (no H/G, H/Hr and H/DM)
Words: 25,638
Chapters: 3
Updated: March 25, 2007
Published: February 7, 2007
Status: Abandoned
DLP-Cat: Alternates or Independent!Harry
FF.Net Summary: Things aren’t going right: the best solution? Obscure rituals, timetravel and the unfortunate side effect of alternate personas that switch at the worst of times. Independent!Harry

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3382166/1/
Link: http://fictionhunt.com/read/3382166/1

This is the first fic of, IMO, the most perspective new author in the last few months. Lush, precise writing style, careful presentation, innovative plot... If he keeps up a solid update rate, he'll get far.

As for this story, it's a weird sort of redo fic, where two very different alternate personalities are plummeted into the body of a 10 year old Harry about to start at Hogwarts; One is 17 year old post!HBP Gryffindor who had created the whole mess in the first place and the other is 27 year old dark wizard mastermind (who sucks at dueling though).

Like I said, the first chapter is a bit confusing, but solid writing style pulled me through the strange introductory parts. Several interesting new ideas and careful characterization spells good for this fic's future, if the author manages to keep up the update rate.

So far,
4.3/5



Edit by Minion, Jan. 2, 2016
I added a link to fictionhunt.
If I linked a wrong story, or if you know where to find another copy of the story, please inform the library staff.

 

Well… Wow. It’s great story, I’m really impressed. All I can hope now is a decent updates, other characters description and that his(her) way of “school year adventures” will be just as original as main plot idea. Through I somewhat at loss what guy with memories of 27-year-old mastermind is going to do in Hogwarts. But that is author for, I think. I read his(her) profile by the way and he(she) likes slash, but mostly Harry/Riddle, so its probably not the case. Also I’m a bit at loss over the third personality (11-year-old) – isn’t too smart for eleven? I mean he only got memories, not mind, so I suppose he somewhat influenced by them both? I sould read it once more and think again.
It’s 5/5 for me now. I like the begining.

 

nicely written even its weird

 

It was somewhat confusing to start with but I felt it became clearer at the end of the chapter.
I look forward to an update but as Dasha has pointed out the author likes slash just as much as he/she likes het so for now I would give 4/5 but it would quickly lose my interest if it turned into a slash fic.

 

it's good but the end is a little bit confusing.

 

Very nice start, esp the hints that Harry isn't sure of exactly who he is. The conflict provided by the different sets of personalities is very refreshing opposed to the traditional godlike!Harry overwriting his previous self and sucking the goblin's and Dumbledore's dicks. It has a great deal of potential: look at the way he is trying to figure out how to handle Hermione: is she a bitch out to kill him or his left hand that watches over him at night? These internal conflicts can lead to very nice character development given time.

4.5/5 so far, but I will be waiting for one or two more chapters before placing a rating to make sure it doesn't go downhill.

 

The writing style seems very much like a thickened version of Razz's.

I love it.

5/5

EDIT: And she also likes Harry/Fem!Harry.

 

aghh i hope it doesn't become h/fem!h i hate that.

 

Oh really?

And why is that?

 

It's just weird. I mean it's amusing if the story is a parody, but in a serious story i just find it sickening that the person Harry finds most attractive is a female version of himself.

 

I really like this. It takes an old idea and gives it a new and interesting twist. I await the next update.

 

it is quite original, fluent and interesting. i really like it. it's been a while since i read a story with a lot attention. i really wish it didn't become slash, and i don't see how a fem!harry could be integrated in this story due to its flow of events and logic. 5/5 for now.

 

I didn't find anything about the first chapter confusing, but the writing style and somewhat unique twist on a reasonably cliched plot has me really liking this.

I especially like that the evaluation on Harry's dueling capabilities and strengths.

 

Nicely written twist on an oveused plot device.

 

Interesting, but just didn't grab my attention for some reason. I'll check back on it once it's further along.

Interesting plot: 3/5
Dark!Wimp!Harry: 2/5
Idiot!Harry: 1/5
Kid!Harry: 0.5/5
Overall: Meh...3/5 for plot and the fact that it's at least something different

 

Interesting start. I find it a little hard to believe that an 10 year old harry would want to be anything but the 'Knight in shining armor' but then I suppose that 10year old harry could probably have his own agenda seperate from the other two as well... this is shaping up to be a rather unique story, I'm not catching where you guy's are finding the Fem!harry however...
4.5/5

 

All right, now THIS is a story I can sink my teeth into. A fascinating start, with a reasonably fresh approach to the "multiple Harry's in one body" AU. I'm a bit concerned about potential issues in continuity and "contrivance overload trap" that is all too easy to fall into in time travel/AU stories. I'll certainly keep my eye on it - and naturally, abandon it completely if it even hints at a possible slash pairing.

4/5

-J

 

Hmmm...

So far I'll give it a 2/5 because it was quite confusing and seemed to jump around a bit too much. I may give it more depended on where the author goes with this, so my vote is not finalized and I'll be waiting a bit. I'm also thinking her use of 'voices' in Harry's head reminds me quite a bit of the seminal work Insertion by Carrotglace, so I can't exactly claim this is an original idea since I've seen it used in other fandoms.

--bornagainpenguin

 

i wish the author wouldn't give up on writing the story. the internal war between the darklord harry and golden boy harry will be very interesting.