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WIP Oblivion by ChaosEmperorNex - M - HP/The Elder Scrolls

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Paradise, Sep 16, 2015.

  1. Paradise

    Paradise Paraplegic Dice DLP Supporter

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    Title: Oblivion
    Author: ChaosEmperorNex
    Rating: M
    Genre: Supernatural and Fantasy
    Status: WIP
    Library Category: The Alternates
    Pairings: Harry/Daphne (Might be some Harry/Fleur later)

    Summary: He's not the Boy-Who-Lived. He's not the Chosen One. He's not even a hero. Quite the opposite in fact. He's a being of such terrible greatness that at one point, those who were hated as devils and worshiped as deities, saw fit to seal him away. Now he's back and he wants his throne. Let Order reign...

    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11035459/1/Oblivion

    Give it a shot I really like it.

    (Not actually complete whoops sorry guys)

    1. That.
    2. Format the title properly.
    3. Format the post properly.
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    5. Write a proper review.

    The Rules sticky is there for a reason (you reading it). Next time, I'm kicking you ass.

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    Last edited: Sep 16, 2015
  2. Clerith

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    I understand why this fic has a one star average. It's pretty bad. Readable, but bad. I got four chapters in, but wanted to quit reading multiple times.

    The writing is trite and cringeworthy. Wet, naked and moist emeralds for eyes for everyone! The Potter family scenes and Lily's internal dialogue especially made me want to gag a little. One-dimensional characters.

    The author seems to have only a basic wiki-level understanding of TES lore. What I've seen is a bit like raping and pissing on a dead corpse. He also insists on spelling Daedric as Deadric. Repeatedly. Yeah.

    It reads like bad fanfiction. It's not interesting at all. The premise is just kinda wrong and the execution is about the same. There's no hook, nothing interesting, the awkward writing made me want to just quit reading.

    2/5. Maybe it gets better later, but I sure as hell didn't want to read to get there. If you can stand the writing and enjoy seeing how the author explores Daedric Princes as humans in Harry Potter, maybe you can stomach it.
     
  3. Hachi

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    Decent literary diarrhea.

    11/10, would cleanse my colon again.
     
  4. phazer11

    phazer11 Third Year

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    You managed four chapters? I barely managed one.
     
  5. newageofpower

    newageofpower Professor DLP Supporter

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    That was... bad.

    Its not easy doing a good HP crossover, and this is just...
     
  6. Drunken dark lord

    Drunken dark lord First Year

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    might be mean but is sadly accurate:
    this is bad and you should feel bad for writing it.

    1/5
     
  7. MoltenCheese

    MoltenCheese Seventh Year

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    But it wasn't him who wrote it though. :confused: You mean put this up for review?

    Anyways, the story was just meh. Won't repeat what's already said.
    2/5, because it at least had complete English sentences.
     
  8. FreakLord

    FreakLord Professor DLP Supporter

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    First of all, this is not Complete. Secondly, this is not library worthy at all. Yes, the author has a lot of potential and fic is quite different from what all other nonsense ones. But I would still give it a 3/5 and would probably mention it Almost Recommended thread.

    3/5 because I find that it falls into a guilty pleasure of mine.
     
  9. Tartarus

    Tartarus Second Year

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    Why is it marked complete if it obviously isn't?

    Anyway couldn't get past the third chapter. I don't really know who well the writer actually know Elder Scroll and if anything is actually accurate but it just feels like he doesn't really know much. Perhaps it gets better later although I doubt it. 1/5
     
  10. Dark Belra

    Dark Belra Minister of Magic

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    3/5 it's a decent time waster but I'll probably not pick it up again or really wait for updates.

    The start is pretty bad though and it only gets slightly less bad as it goes.
     
  11. corrwin

    corrwin Second Year

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    Heh, a king of fic I read for a bit, than promise myself I'll give up on sub-standard fan fiction and read more original novels. But after some time when none of my favourites have been updated for some time, I end up reading more...
    After four chapters... I don't think two universes were melted together particularly well. Several HP characters got possessed by beings way too powerful and it will be hard to balance it out and give the story any real conflict.
    At least we're promised there'll be no incest... I was worried after some scenes.
    Overall... maybe 2,5/5 ? I will probably revisit the story, if it keeps being mentioned here and someone will sell it to me.
     
  12. Captain Trips

    Captain Trips High Inquisitor

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    Is this the shitty fic were several HP characters are Daedric Princes, and Harry is Jyggalag?
     
  13. Hachi

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    Yes.

    /10char
     
  14. M.L.

    M.L. Groundskeeper

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    I don't think he fit the two universes together well. Also the author did a bad job characterizing Jygalagg/Harry. It was kind of obvious he was using Sai from Naruto as a base and I don't think it fit. Fine concept but not a great execution.

    2/5
     
  15. Curry Potter

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    I didn't think it was too bad. It's not good either, Harry is basically not even Harry anymore in this one. 2/5
     
  16. Armani

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    This story is horrible. I will not waste time to repeat things already said.
    1/5
     
  17. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    This is textbook shit post.