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Complete Polywank by LizardLaugh - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Skeletaure, Mar 27, 2015.

  1. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Title: Polywank
    Author: LizardLaugh
    Rating: M
    Status: Complete, 3k words
    Library Category: Restricted section
    Pairing: Harry/Tonks, kinda
    Summary: Tonks laughed. “No, not much use for polyjuice, though I did quite well at it as I recall. The whole class was very anxious to see what form my partner would take.” Honks.
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/2255313/1/Polywank

    Harry experiments with polyjuice. Pretty decent smut: realistic, well set-up, creative situation, not overly anatomical. For what it is, 4/5.
     
  2. Stan

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    Meh. It was OK at best, but if it ever meant to be a smutfic, it left much to be desired, and as a humor fic it wasn't all that funny, though I did chuckle there at the end.

    Read the first chapter of Deadwoodpecker's Polyjuice, Memory Charms, and More for real Polyjuice smut (and then review it here). May be its just my opinion, but this one isn't even in the same league as the other story.
     
  3. Nuit

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    Stan, we get it, you like the fic. You can stop pushing it on people.
     
  4. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Read it years ago. It's okay, but nothing great. Two married people who've had sex many times in the past having sex isn't all that interesting, even if they're trying out a new kink. I like a bit more plot to my smut than that.
     
  5. Stan

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    Hah, Guilty. In my defense, it was directly relevant to the topic here. Plus, I generally love polyjuice smut fics, and this one was just disappointing.

    Taure : Well, I guess that depends on what you want from your smut fic. While reading smut oneshot fics, my first priority is good quality smut. Deadwoodpecker delivers on that, this fic does not. In fact, there was barely any smut at all -- which makes me question the point of the story. Its not as if this fic has much of a plot either.
     
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  6. Newcomb

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    Decent, I guess. I wish the author had made it more explicit that Tonks left him that hair on purpose. Otherwise it's just so fucked up - I mean, I totally understand Harry's impulse there, but it's just such an extreme violation of privacy.

    Luna's single line made me chuckle.

    Interesting, in a semi-uncomfortable way. Decent writing. Nothing I'd read again.

    3/5
     
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    Not funny. I didn't like the premise enough to enjoy it without it being funny. Technically sound, but nothing I can rate above 2/5.
     
  8. Skeletaure

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    Smut isn't just sex. In fact, once the sex begins, smutfics normally get pretty boring. For me at least, the best part of a smut fic is the "undressing" part: Harry seeing X girl nude for the first time, and the UST/flirtation leading up to it. After that I've largely lost my interest. So this fic is pretty efficient in that regard.

    Newcomb: I kinda like it ambiguous. Even if she left him the hair deliberately, it's still uncomfortable because Harry doesn't know she left it to him deliberately, so it was still an attempted violation of privacy. Which is the whole point. It's a voyeurism fic.

    Edit: why are y'all discussing whether it's funny or not? It's not a humour fic.
     
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    That's why.
     
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    It was boring to be honest. Even when Harry was getting excited I wasn't. I wasn't expecting humor or anything but I did expect to be entertained. I was not.

    Pro's: Technically sound. Decent premise and it doesn't drag out.
    Con's: Boring.

    Rating from me: 2/5
     
  11. Stan

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    That's not quite true. The author marked it as a Humor/Romance story.

    Newcomb : Honestly, it did not even occur to me to be uncomfortable about Harry polyjuicing to Tonks. May be it was because I pretty much knew what would happen before I started reading the story. May be it was because it already happened in DH when Hermione, Fleur and the boys polyjuiced into Harry, and Harry wasn't too bothered. Either way, it did not bother me at all.
     
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  12. Skeletaure

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    As far as I know, none of the people transforming into Harry in DH took a look at his junk...
     
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    There's a world of difference between people using Polyjuice to turn into you in your presence with your knowledge and (reluctant) consent as part of plan to get out of a life-threatening situation, and using Polyjuice to turn into a girl, in private, without her knowledge or consent (probably), to fuck around with her body.

    Like, I really don't see a ton of difference between what happens in the fic and Harry slipping Tonks a sleeping potion and feeling her up, to be honest. I mean, if she's into it, cool, but if she honestly had no idea and the hair was just an accident, it's creepy as fuck.

    I mean, imagine this was Draco doing it to, say, Luna.

    Ew.
     
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    Eh. Last few sentences mildly amused me, but certainly not enough to justify 3k words of blandness getting there.
     
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    Such as it was, the smut wasn't that great. I've read worse, sure, but I've read a hell of a lot better. Add in the creepyness of the premise, which then doesn't really get addressed, and it's not that great. 2/5
     
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    I have no idea why this is being labeled as smut. It's not even bad smut. Harry turned into Tonks and fingered himself. That was supposed to be the meat of this oneshot and it was practically skipped over. I barely blinked at it. A random Gogle image search would likely be more titillating.

    Bland and really tame compared to some stuff you can find in fics in no way meant to be smutty.

    Nothing about this stands out. At least bad fics make me rage, they elicit something, you know? This did absolutely nothing for me. A perfectly mediocre waste of time.

    Tbh, I checked it out because Taure recced it. I am disappoint, mate. You get no points. The fic gets 1,5/5 rounded down.
     
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  17. Charlesnaismith

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    I thought it was enjoyable. Nice last few lines, impressive given it was written in 2005.

    4/5