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Oneshot Santa's Helper by Moons Aria - Oneshot

Discussion in 'Humor' started by KeshinNoAkui, Feb 6, 2007.

  1. KeshinNoAkui

    KeshinNoAkui Seventh Year

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    Title: Santa's Helper
    Author: Moon's Aria
    Rating: K
    Genre: Romance/Humor
    DLP Category: Humor/Parody
    Pairing: Harry/Luna (more or less implied)
    Words: 4,396
    Published: December 20, 2006

    Status: Complete
    Summary: What might have happened if Voldemort attacked the Potters on one of the more popular muggle holidays? What if another had found little Harry on the front stoop of the Dursleys and took him in as his own?
    Link: FF.suck

    A little late, since Xmas was well over 1 1/2 months ago, but I found this quite cute, and the ending was rather humorous as well.


    Checked by Minion, February 6, 2013
     
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  2. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Cute story. I wonder if the author would consider turning it into a full-blown story? 4/5
     
  3. DemonDream

    DemonDream Professor

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    Cute and quirky. I would also like to see a full story out of this. 4/5
     
  4. yojorocks

    yojorocks Seventh Year

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    Cute oneshot; an original twist to the Harry Potter universe that deserves to be read if nothing else. Honestly, the only complaint I can think of was the inclusion of Voldemort: The author could have cut off without dealing them and it would have been just fine, but by introducing them like that he leaves the ending a little more openended than I would prefer. Truly my only complaint was that the part when he was taken in the beginning confused me: Harry was dropped off on Christmas Eve? A large derivation from canon, but considering what some authors have done, easily accepted.

    4/5: original and well written, preserving the elements of canon HP while introducing a radically different aspect to it.
     
  5. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    I read it for the implied Harry/Luna and stayed for the story.

    It's a cute little original one-shot. I thought it was interesting despite the fact it sort of split from canon. I enjoyed the part with Luna Lovegood. The only part I saw that was pointless being put in was the whole part with the Death Eaters though I chuckled at one or two parts in that section.

    With that being said, and for what it is. I give it a 4/5, and definitely think it's worthy of the Library.
     
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  6. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    Meh. It was alright. 'Cute' is definitely the most appropriate word. I kept waiting for a bigger punchline, but it never came. The prank on the Death Eaters at the end was too silly to be funny.

    3/5
     
  7. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Definitely not very humorous. 2.5/5