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Abandoned Shadow of the Blood Moon by fullsailnate - M

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by nonjon, Sep 7, 2006.

  1. nonjon

    nonjon Alumni Retired Staff

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    Title: Shadow of the Blood Moon
    Author: fullsailnate
    Rating: M
    Genre: Action/Adventure/Romance
    Pairing: Most likely H/Hr
    Suggested category: "The Alternate's"
    Chapters: 3
    Words: 13,368
    Updated: August 28, 2006
    Published: August 12, 2006
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: Harry is taken from his house the night after Dumbledore leaves him there. He grows up to be something that neither side could have predicted.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3100761/1/

    Only 3 chapters and 13,000 words so far, so not a whole lot here yet. But I've always liked everything else this author has put out (Draconus, The Fourth Power, Powerful Beyond Belief), and despite being a bit of a Hermione fanboy, he makes some pretty nifty super-Harry stories.

    This latest one, Harry's a lightning child. Kidnapped by Vampires and now he's 18 or 19 and he's the leader of the most elite cadre of Vampire Assassins. He's not a Vampire, but he's a bit different. Kinda like Vamps feed off blood, he feeds off magic. As a baby, ate the killing curse thing, survived and became 'lightning child' much younger than he should have. Voldemort's kind of a mockery, and Hermione is a Vampire Slayer as well as Order member. Maybe not as much daunting odds here. So far it's got a sort of Goliath versus David feel, if we're rooting for Harry as Goliath. Less then imaginative or inspired names, but still. If you like Fourth Power and Powerful Beyond Belief, I think you can look past things like "Blitz Moonshadow" and enjoy this fic.

    Author is an American deployed in Iraq, so his update schedule is unsurprisingly sporadic.


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  2. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    God damn nonjon, I was just about to post this. Surprisingly good for a vampire story, but like the guy's other stories, I don't expect to see this finished in my lifetime...
     
  3. mcatrage

    mcatrage Raptured to Hell

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    really cool story.

    very different vampire story than the typical ones. 3 chapters in and it already has good action, just wondering what harry is mainly going to use, physical attacks or start using spells more.

    4/5 hope it updates quickly
     
  4. emt10

    emt10 First Year

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    I really like this story. I remember reading Draconus awhile back, and have to say that his writing style has improved from what I remember of that story. I give it about a 4/5.

    emt10
     
  5. The-Hyphenated-One

    The-Hyphenated-One Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    ya this story has a very good start to it and is much different then any other vamp story i have read. the concept of a vampire that feads off magic is a very brilliant idea. as of now ill give it a 5/5
     
  6. Shuujaku

    Shuujaku Fourth Year

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    I somehow doubt Voldemort would give a rat's ass about Cedric Diggory, considering the fact that his rebirth required the "blood of an enemy, forcibly taken."

    Other than that, it's a good story with a high wtf-factor. 4/5

    Edit:
    New rating as of chapter 3: 2/5
    Wow, this author knows how to fuck up. F+
     
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  7. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    When I saw "blood moon" I immediately thought of Morrowind. But alas, there's no HP/TES3 crossovers. Yet.
     
  8. Bungler

    Bungler Guest

    I don't like this story.

    Voldemorts way(a very long ''way'') to stupid for me to like this story.

    But I'll wait for more chapters, if he doesn't stop making Voldemort into a stupid afraid little shit with a enormous ego and the memory of a goldfish, I'll drop this story.
     
  9. The Dark Monarch

    The Dark Monarch Backtraced

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    Finally a vampire story without draco or slash! I could die of shock! Its almost as rare as het veela stories. I'll rate it after I read it. But I did like the Fourth power so I hope I like this too.
     
  10. CGB

    CGB Auror

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    OK so far. Not great, but not bad either. I need a few more chapters to see how the plot develops. I'll rate it later.
     
  11. Mercenary

    Mercenary Snake Eater

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    It off to a great start, however being deployed in Iraq means we might or might not get an update. Ever. But still if he updates, I cant wait. 4.5/5
     
  12. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    Good story. Much better than others I've read. Hermione as a slayer was an interesting twist. I need another chapter or two to rate this.
     
  13. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    It was okay, I'll give it that. I probably wouldnt have read it if I wasnt so bored and desperate for a story to read.

    Slayer!Hermione just isnt something I like very much.