Title: Synchronicity
Author: slexenskee
Rating: T
Chapters: 17
Words: 135,937
Updated: October 16,2015
Published: June 21, 2008
Status: Work in Progress

Summary:
Ever since the seal broke, Naruto's life has changed. He's been thrust into ANBU: he's starting to lose sight of which half is him and which half is his demon, he can't seem to find his way back to team seven, and he's been having these weird dreams - with a sky wrenched apart by a broken moon, a man with a staff, and a version of him with glowing, nine-tomoe eyes.

Link:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/4339589/1/Synchronicity

I found this fic to be pretty well written grammar wise and the story itself is very interesting. Since there have been quite a few positive reviews for it I figured I'd post here to get other opinions.


Edit by Minion: Oh, yeah, while we - the staff - are really appreciating that people post stories for review, we also would appreciate it if you keep using the official posting formats.

 

Story is very good. Writing is good, the author is clearly skilled. it's clear that he's got a plan that he's following.

Having said that, I don't like a good part of the premise. I don't like the idea of the Kyuubi taking over Naruto's body, regardless of how good the execution is. Having also said that, the execution is about perfect.

3/5 from me, but only because I dislike the premise. The fic is great.

 

I'm of a mind with Rep here. The writing itself is fine, but the Kyuubi running about in Naruto's body bothers me. Part of why I read fanfiction starring a particular protagonist is because I want to see that protagonist take center stage. I stuck it out as best I could, but ended up dropping it a few chapters ago.

3/5

 

I thought both the story and the writing were very good. The ramifications of Kyuubi walking around in Naruto's body were handled well, both when it comes to Naruto's development as well as the village in general. In general it feels like a well thought out piece of work. Personally, the premise didn't bother me as much though it would be more engaging if Naruto had more agency in the story.

4/5