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Abandoned The Girl From Whirlpool by SilverShine - T - Naruto

Discussion in 'Naruto' started by Howdy, Oct 4, 2010.

  1. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    Sadly, it is the mark of a great author to know when they end their story. So I do hope she does end it when it should end.
     
  2. Ceebee

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    For those unaware, this got another update. Includes some Minato v A and Minato's return to Konoha.
     
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    And it once again solidifies why Minato is awesome, as well as human. I especially liked the byplay between him and Kushina over dinner.
     
  4. RustyRed

    RustyRed High Inquisitor

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    I really like the way this author writes Minato--he's awesome without even trying. And the stuff that people make fun of him for--lavender shirts, nice smelling hair, thoughtfulness, etc--just make those moments of badassery even more sweet. I particularly liked the bit where he was fighting with one hand and eating a biscuit with the other. :awesome
     
  5. Ragon

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    Just for the record, Im all for moving this out of For Review and into Naruto.
     
  6. Howdy

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    Recycling bin?



    RECYCLING BIN???
     
  7. Khazad-Dumb

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    Read it. Twas a damn fine read that deserves more than the Recycling Bin. 4/5 for me.
     
  8. Howdy

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    Well it's clearly a clerical error, but still.
     
  9. Iztiak

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    Rofl, this definitely does not belong in the recycling bin. x:
     
  10. Ragon

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    Agreed out of the bin please.
     
  11. Fenraellis

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    ...Yeah, I just saw this in the bin... and was curious as well. Sadly, not an update to the story itself.
     
  12. Ceebee

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    Not bad.

    My one big concern is still that Sarutobi seems too distant towards Minato. The manga shows that they were very close friends, and I just can't see Sarutobi deciding, or even hinting on deciding, for Minato to be Hokage without a better relationship forming between the two.

    Oh well, hopefully there will be more Minato/Sarutobi interaction soon.
     
  14. Ragon

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    Updated.

    filler
     
  15. Iztiak

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    Well, there's still an entire war that has to go on before he becomes Hokage, yes? I can see them becoming friends over that time period. >_>
     
  16. Khazad-Dumb

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    Why is this still in the Recycling Bin? This is definitely my favorite Naruto story still being worked on.

    Speaking of which, updated.

    Sakumo finally offs himself
     
  17. Ryuugi Shi

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    Was pretty long in coming; I mean, we all knew it would happen. However, I do like the way she pulled it off.

    The only real complaint I have is that, well, since we saw everything from Minato's eyes, we're like him; we always say Sakumo, the hardass asskicker. We didn't see much of the weakness Kushina mentioned until recently, so it was still a bit strange seeing him fall.
     
  18. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    That's not even a complaint from me. You see how everyone's neglecting his situation in favor of the war or the corpse-theft mission or something else. Hell, I'd have at least given him a suicidal mission to accomplish or something. But hey, at least the build-up came through. Now we see Minato take care of Kakashi and Kushina, who are going to be incredibly broken human beings.
     
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    Sakumo down and the beginning of the Orochimaru defection? Shit's about to get real as hell.

    Also, what even in the fuck is this 5/5 fic still doing in the Recycling Bin.
     
  20. Fenraellis

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    As stated by others, even though it was expected, Sakumo's death was written quite well, along with Kakashi's shock.
    It was also interesting to see once more Kushina's almost seeming naivety/denial as to war and killing(perceptions in-universe at least). Minato's reflection about their relative degrees of trust in each other was also good.

    In other thoughts, whileI know Minato has his moniker already, and unless I'm forgetting something, I suppose that makes the one ninja who got away, the one that really helps to stir up fear of Minato within Earth Country.

    ...also...

    *insert comment questioning location in the Recycling Bin*