Abandoned To Make Old Friends - Incidental Pegasus No. 5 - K - MLP:FiM

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  1. Chengar Qordath

    Chengar Qordath The Final Pony Prestige

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    Title: To Make Old Friends
    Author: Incidental Pegasus No. 5
    Rating: Everyone
    Genre: Adventure / Alternate Universe

    Chapters: 8
    Words: 35,622
    Published: May 24, 2012
    Updated: March 4, 2013
    Status: Abandoned

    Fandom: My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic
    Pairings: None listed
    Summary:
    It started out as an ordinary day for Fluttershy – waking up in her house in Cloudsdale and going to work managing the weather for Ponyville alongside her best friend Cloud Kicker. However, she finds herself troubled by feelings she can't explain, feelings that something serious is wrong. When she starts having visions of a strange life with strange ponies, she's determined to find them and find out what's going on. But how can such a timid pony convince others of what she isn't sure of herself?
    Link: Right here

    I'm a big fan of this. We get a nicely developed universe with some very interesting takes on the characters that feel different enough to be a true alternate universe, but familiar enough to be the characters we know. Not to mention the ongoing mystery of where the split in the universe came and why Fluttershy is experiencing the memories of her main universe counterpart.

    Also, it's got Cloud Kicker.


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  2. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Comeon, people, get out of your closets. I am hesitating to move it without further reviews, just based on the rating.
     
  3. tragicmat1

    tragicmat1 Death Eater

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    It's MLP though, and I don't want to read it :p

    Edit: Wow, I didn't know we had a whole sub forum dedicated to MLP fanfics.
     
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  4. Red Aviary

    Red Aviary Hogdorinclawpuff Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I'm on my way out, but I'll share my thoughts. Again, I read it before, but I didn't leave a review.

    Pretty much as Chengar said in his post, it's clearly an alternate universe, and an interesting one at that. The characters are familiar, yet distinctly different. Applejack stayed in Manehattan and became what the unaltered Rarity wishes she was. This Rarity works for the Cakes. Pinkie sells rocks. Twilight is a struggling university student with no direction in her life (well hey, that's somewhat familiar isn't it?).

    While that's interesting in all, it didn't draw me in very much. I'm curious as to why these universes diverged and why Fluttershy is experiencing these glimpses into Equestria-1 (you'll forgive me for drawing from comics with that term), but there isn't any conflict or anything to tie it all off. It's just Fluttershy meandering around wondering what's going on. I won't say it's bad, but it's... bland, I guess? It didn't stick with me. Something exciting needs to happen. Maybe not a massive, deadly Changeling invasion or anything, but, you know, something. I guess I'll give it a 3.5/5 for now.
     
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