Bumped to gain attention:

I really was sure people would jump at this story.

Please read and review and rate this story. I'll leave it in here until Feb. 15.

 

I'd give it 4/5 for now. It really is still too short to be reviewed properly but based on the current work, the quality seems good enough.

There are no glaring mistakes grammar-wise nor there are any of that irritating cliches about Shirou and over-tsundereness of Rin that's prevalent in a lot of F/SN fics. The characters feels fleshed out as it should since he's only focusing on Rin and Shirou.
Their character feels like it matured just enough to be different from pre-HGW but believable in a sense that they are war veterans now.

Not much angst but it's fairly easy to predict where the story is going since it deals with the aftermath of the Matou household and how they dealt with Sakura.

All in all, this is a relationship fic, one that focuses on character development and dialogue. A little bit of mystery here and there makes it into an interesting read that will probably catch your attention depending on what mood you're in.

 

Gave it a read. Enjoyable so far and something I've always wanted done (Post UBW or Fate route which actually deals with Sakura's predicament in the aftermath). It has that almost VN style writing style which kind of works here and is pulled off well.

But at 12,000 words, too short to rate.

 

It's too short to rate.
Also, the tense is all wrong.
As much as I like present tense stories...

"He actually wasn't planning to until he knows for sure" is not good style - the author is clearly trying to use present tense, but he frequently throws past tense into the same sentence and it reads awful.

 

This is really poorly written. The sentences are abrasively short - not as a stylistic choice, but seemingly more because the author doesn't have the attention span to finish a thought, or is trying to write like a light novel, or some nonsense like that. Combined with the utter disregard for consistent tenses mentioned above, it destroys the syntax of the text.

Not for me. Perhaps people who enjoy this style more would be less critical.

I will say one thing in its favour - not all of the character interactions are anime-autism levels of socially retarded. Half of them seem to be, on purpose, but when the author isn't trying too hard with cringey faux shyness there's an unusual sincerity to the relationships here, when compared to the typical dross in this genre.

There's very little plot progression. It's not enjoyable to read. There are only 20,000 words here.

I'd only suggest reading this if this particular scenario is something you're keenly interested in and can't find elsewhere.

2/5