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Complete WIP - Remus Lupin, PI by Larry Huss - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by wolf550e, Apr 27, 2011.

  1. wolf550e

    wolf550e High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Title: Remus Lupin, PI
    Author: Larry Huss
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/Crime
    DLP Category: General
    Pairing: Harry/Padma/Hermione
    Status: Complete
    Summary: Remus Lupin didn't graduate from Hogwarts to become an odd-jobs man. He always knew he would be fighting the good fight, he just didn't know on which side of the Law. In the end,he made his own side
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6275865/1/Remus_Lupin_PI

    I searched DLP and couldn't find it. It's a Lupin finds Harry and takes him from from the Dursleys to be raised under an assumed name by a good muggle foster family kind of story. POV is Remus and Harry. A good re-do, well written, well researched author's notes. 56,944 words so far, at the begining of third year. I don't think it's really DLP's sort of stuff, but I like it.
    Romance-wise, looks like it's going to be a threesome, the girls are not in a relationship with each other, no harem planned.

    Same author as Out of the West.
     
  2. scaryisntit

    scaryisntit Death Eater

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    Harry/Padma (even with Hermione involved)? Seratin should be here any minute now...

    As for the fic, sounds odd. I'll give it a shot.
     
  3. Castiel

    Castiel Headmaster

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    Just yesterday I was wondering where the fuck Lupin was when Harry was growing up...
     
  4. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Read the first chapter, and while the writing could be cleaned up a bit it's surprisingly entertaining so far. I'll keep reading and rate later.
     
  5. Cathal

    Cathal Sir Nils' Right Hand

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    How did I not think of this myself?
     
  6. Seratin

    Seratin Proudmander –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    5/5.

    Now, off to actually read it.
     
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  7. Nooblet

    Nooblet Sixth Year DLP Supporter

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    Still reading, but after two chapters this is hinting heavily at Evil!Manipulative!Dumbledore
     
  8. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    It's more OldMan!Dumbledore than anything, really.

    ---------- Post automerged at 11:05 AM ---------- Previous post was at 10:17 AM ----------

    Finished what's available, so far I'm very much enjoying the story. It's rather quirky but effectively written, the author doesn't get stuck on unnecessary details and isn't doing a canon!rehash, thankfully.
     
  9. Kensington

    Kensington Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Surprisingly pleasant read.

    This is perhaps my favorite characterization yet of Remus and I'm enjoying the original twists to canon. However, I'm not too thrilled with Hermione and Padma more or less deciding that they'll seduce and share Harry, especially as 11/12 year old girls. It seems a tad crackish for this story.

    3.5 would be ideal, but i"ll round up to 4/5.
     
  10. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Yeah, that was a bit bizarre, though to be fair young teen girls plot ways to get at boys all the time. Usually not together, though.
     
  11. addictedforlife

    addictedforlife High Inquisitor

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    Ehh... it's pretty ok, IMO. Interesting style, some fun ideas, and the author notes are actually quite hilarious at times. The author should, however, not rely on Google for his translations.
     
  12. hchan1

    hchan1 Sixth Year

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    There's something about the author's writing style that reminds me of Pratchett. I'm not sure if it's the irreverent humor or the silly footnotes, but whatever it is I love it. Easy 5/5 from me.
     
  13. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    It's not terrible... if it's supposed to be tongue in cheek (which I think it is), it works reasonably well, although parts aren't that great. I really would put this in almost recommended, not the library. Remus isn't really anything close to correct, and Dumbledore is annoyingly manipulative.

    Maybe 2.5/5
     
  14. TheWiseTomato

    TheWiseTomato Prestigious Tomato ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Interested. Will open a tab for it and read it after work.

    Edit: Read the first chapter and will now probably be late for work. Worth it, I think. 4.5/5.
     
    Last edited: Apr 28, 2011
  15. ParseltonguePhoenix

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    I found this an amusing enough time-waster. It has a good bit of flaws (more telling than showing, lack of deeper characterization, and a Dumbledore who has well and truly lost the plot), but the overall tone of the story itself kept me reading.


    I agree with you for the most part, but I liked aspects of Remus' character. His job and how he works for mental discipline and control of his wolfish side were handled pretty well. Beyond that, you pretty much nailed exactly what I thought of the fic.

    As a tongue-in-cheek kind of story, it's reasonably entertaining, but it doesn't deserve to be in the library. The Recycling Bin would be a good place for it, imo. 3/5 from me.
     
  16. Gulliver

    Gulliver Second Year

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    This was...strange. When read as crack, the Padma/Hermione conspiracy is quite funny, but that is one of the few redeeming parts of it. Dumbledore is just awful.

    Recycling bin. 2/5
     
  17. Shouldabeenadog

    Shouldabeenadog Death Eater

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    Its got a little bit of a lot of things in it, and somehow it works out well. 4/5 from me.
     
  18. Grubdubdub

    Grubdubdub Supreme Mugwump

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    I have mixed feelings about this story. While the narrative is great, the Dumbledore bashing is facepalm worthy. The fast (but not rushed) flow of the story has kept me reading, that and the lack of a canon rehash, but it's not a masterpiece.

    Other peeves: Harry being Mary-Sueish, Sirius being called Cesar in the narrative, and the Hermione/Padma 'jump on a dick' vibe.

    Great to pass the time, it will be frustrating at times but not so much that you'll stop reading. 3.5/5.
     
  19. FreakLord

    FreakLord Professor DLP Supporter

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    Not DLP worthy

    2/5
     
  20. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    Wasn't awesome, but was entertaining.

    Don't really know how I feel about Lupin taming his wolf. On the one hand, it sort of cheapens his character not to have to deal with turning into a bloodthirsty killer once a month. On the other hand, alcoholic!werewolf is sort of funny.

    4/5
     
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